The thread has been very informative for me as a low time pilot. And I certainly took on board Ian's comment about a pilot being judged by others by their radio calls. (Some of my fumbling half wrong calls would certainly alert others to my experience level. ).
I would not like to venture into changing the order of the phrases. It has the Swiss cheese effect. It's called a 'normalised violation of the rules' in the safety experts field.
The real problem is, from my point of view, not treating the radio for what it is...it's a radio..speak slightly louder and slightly slower. So much of what I hear is completely garbled because it's just said too fast.